The ocean waves breathe with the endless rasping tongue of creation. A man knocks on my door. A gift wrapped in fear and blood. The last day of a short story told in serial.
That’s okay, I’m not sure I understand it completely yet either. When I was writing this, it just kind of created itself. I was working on writing a short story every week (for a full year—I only made it to week 25) with a friend of mine and we would start with the same prompt and then see what we each came up with and how differently we interpreted the prompts. Because of the quick time frame, I let the stories come as they would and didn’t question them too deeply. So I really haven’t spent enough time with this, the way I would if I would writing a longer piece of work. But there could be a longer, more thought out story behind this, I would just need to spend more time with it.
So are they Holy vampires? And did I misread or do they retain the memories of those they consume? Interesting concept of a new species. Yes I would like to see what you do with this world. ❤️
I think they are some combination of vampire and zombie, risen from the floor of the ocean and Atlantis, who take the memories of those they consume (not memories as a collective but rather individual memories, however memories could begin to compile and overlap as they create a new society in their image. I wrote the basic story 3 years ago, before “Sinners”, and thought it was interesting that they had the idea of collective memory. That’s probably written into lore somewhere and I’m forgetting it.) However they were all devout before, so by retaining their memories, perhaps there is a Holy aspect to them? I purposely threw in the more religious language to show his shifting connections to what is Divine.
Woah! What a fantastic transformation at the end. Although our narrator has changed, in some ways he's the same. He's still focused on conversion, of being the one to bring people along for "revelation" and "knowing." It's just the way to do that has now changed. He's become some new form of vampire. The idea they he must feed every so often, to gain "enlightenment," is interesting. He must eat the soul/person, retaining the memories of that person, and that makes him feel he's closer to the divine, to God. Interesting.
I can see these new creatures over the next 100 years developing some kind of hierarchy based on how many souls you've consumed, but also regulations on who is allowed to eat and when. There are so many ways you could go with this.
Interesting but not sure I understand it. It's my old brain. LOL
That’s okay, I’m not sure I understand it completely yet either. When I was writing this, it just kind of created itself. I was working on writing a short story every week (for a full year—I only made it to week 25) with a friend of mine and we would start with the same prompt and then see what we each came up with and how differently we interpreted the prompts. Because of the quick time frame, I let the stories come as they would and didn’t question them too deeply. So I really haven’t spent enough time with this, the way I would if I would writing a longer piece of work. But there could be a longer, more thought out story behind this, I would just need to spend more time with it.
Whoa!
So are they Holy vampires? And did I misread or do they retain the memories of those they consume? Interesting concept of a new species. Yes I would like to see what you do with this world. ❤️
I think they are some combination of vampire and zombie, risen from the floor of the ocean and Atlantis, who take the memories of those they consume (not memories as a collective but rather individual memories, however memories could begin to compile and overlap as they create a new society in their image. I wrote the basic story 3 years ago, before “Sinners”, and thought it was interesting that they had the idea of collective memory. That’s probably written into lore somewhere and I’m forgetting it.) However they were all devout before, so by retaining their memories, perhaps there is a Holy aspect to them? I purposely threw in the more religious language to show his shifting connections to what is Divine.
Woah! What a fantastic transformation at the end. Although our narrator has changed, in some ways he's the same. He's still focused on conversion, of being the one to bring people along for "revelation" and "knowing." It's just the way to do that has now changed. He's become some new form of vampire. The idea they he must feed every so often, to gain "enlightenment," is interesting. He must eat the soul/person, retaining the memories of that person, and that makes him feel he's closer to the divine, to God. Interesting.
I can see these new creatures over the next 100 years developing some kind of hierarchy based on how many souls you've consumed, but also regulations on who is allowed to eat and when. There are so many ways you could go with this.
Thank you for sharing such a cool story!